Quantcast
Viewing latest article 21
Browse Latest Browse All 63

Fragile | a poem

I have dabbled in writing poetry since high school. Unsurprisingly, most of what I wrote back then is pretty subpar stuff, and that's putting it mildly. But the poem below is one of the first poems I ever wrote that I think is actually decent when I look back on it today. I have decided to start posting more of my poetry on this site and perhaps it will inspire me to write more.

This was written just days after the death of a very close family friend. He was a great man and it was an immensely sad time for me. I was in my late teens and looked up to him quite a bit. His death got me thinking about the fragility of human existence. James 4:14b came to my thoughts at the time, "For what is your life? It is even a vapour, that appeareth for a little time, and then vanisheth away." With those things on my mind, I sat down and wrote the poem below.


fragile

like a vapor, here and then gone
a sudden sigh, now one's passed on
life is so fragile, a smoky wisp
a passing shadow, an ocean's mist

turn of a page, blink of an eye
a drop in a pool, a flash 'cross the sky
only an instant, then they are through
gone so soon, like the kiss of dew

© 2001 J.D. Sutter

A few years ago, in early 2020, composer Dominic Treis wrote a piece of music to accompany my narration of the poem. He also added some light sound effects as well. I think it turned out quite nicely. The copyright date in the audio is different from the one above. That is my fault, not Dominic's. Back then I gave him the date when I had first published the poem online, rather than the actual original year it was written. (Click the link above to hear recent samples of his work.)


Back in 2021, I handwrote the poem to test out a device called the Rocketbook, a reusable notebook that can easily scan notes into digital files. I thought I'd share that as a fun, little bonus. Here is the result.

Some of the feedback I've received on this poem over the years:
  • "the imagery is beautiful. this is a bittersweet poem, i think, because it combines the sadness of the shortness of life along with a sense of reverence and love for that life. i think it really shows that this was inpired by something very deep and genuine, because it is so heartfelt...good job :)" -- Ailee
  • "I love the imagery and the similes in this piece. The rhyme scheme is simple and I like it. I think it's short but full of strong emotions on your view of death." -- Coral
  • "This is wonderful. Your words paint an image as delicate as a spider's web. You expressed your thoughts very well." -- Emily
  • "Great writing ... Succinct..great metaphors..flows nicely..deep." -- Roy


Hope you enjoyed this poem. More to come! Please share this post with someone who you think will enjoy it!




Viewing latest article 21
Browse Latest Browse All 63

Trending Articles